WALT: Show not tell.
WALT: Use lots of verbs.
I heaved myself up the beautiful wooden ladder, the beautiful soft amazing and warm bed. The pillows were like a white puffy cloud under head but the pillows were not white they were pillows of amazing colours. The blankets were warm and fuzzy around me as I lay down with my eyes shut tightly, it was the most comfiest bed EVER, the beautiful feeling of a fluffy cloud under my head (the pillow.) The bed was so warm with its colorful blankets and their were so many pillows.
That is a good description. It makes me what to use some of those words. E.g. Heaved, Fluffy cloud ect. From your buddy, Kaitlin
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